Wednesday, 30 October 2013

My writing story.



There were two kids called  zelda and fillex and they away in a store where nobody can see them.Fillex was the biggest hes the one that brown straight hair it was dark as a bear fer but it wasn't that dark. zelda was the youngest she had curly hair bright like the sun .






1 comments:

maopat said...

* One thing I love about your narrative story is it interesting.

* My favourite sentence of your story is zelda was the youngest she had curly hair bright like the sun .

* One thing I think you could work on next time is writing more paragraph.

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